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Making the Ordinary, Extraordinary

The Leaves Of Paradise

Fate423 gave readers a challenge: make a five sentence story with the theme of paradise. So I did. Here it goes!

The leaves of Paradise...

The leaves of Paradise…

The screen porch clacked as he rushed out, face turned up to catch the swift breeze.

His smile stretched out, and with a whoop he ran past the twiggy gate.

Lengthening his stride, he ran round the corner at the end, ignoring the small dog that complained about his rude awakening from a daily nap.

There it was, the endless flowers and fields and possible adventures and dreams of Guilesberry Falls and Park.

His little slice of paradise.

I`ve never done anything that short, and to find that I fit a whole (albeit abbreviated) story into the proper length? I`m so proud of my constantly expanding writing skills. See? You guys really do inspire me :)

I have a new prompt. Give me a poem in five lines, AA BB C rhyming pattern. Go!


5 comments on “The Leaves Of Paradise

  1. Marisa
    March 24, 2013

    This was fantastic! It’s a lot of fun right? The length can be somewhat challenging at first, but once you get into it, it’s somewhat surprising how much you can pack into a few short sentences! I loved it, you should absolutely be proud! :)

  2. jonathanochart
    March 25, 2013

    What a nice little slice of paradise of a post you’ve got here :p You have a gift with words – keep it up…there’s nothing I like more than sentences filled with strong words and images!


    • TheGreatZambini
      March 25, 2013

      Oh, thanks! It was so hard to crunch a whole story into such little space, but I think the exercise was good for expanding my skills :)

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